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sur la nuit d'automne
elle tire les nouveaux rideaux -
velours rouge ...


Vincent Hoarau, France
cco 2015-11-1

Commentaire.

Structure peu souvent utilisée, le 2+1. Et en plus très souvent fort mal car l'auteur veut à tout prix donner en L3 la conclusion au cas où le lecteur n'aurait pas compris. Rien de tout cela ici. L3 a de l'importance. Il apporte un élément non résolu. Pourquoi rouge ? C'est le genre de technique qui permet au haïku de ne pas être mis en mémoire rapidement et donc oublié. Il traine un peu dans la mémoire rapide parce que l'esprit se demande "au fait, pourquoi rouge ?". Les éléments non résolus immédiatement augmentent la survie du haïku en mémoire parce qu'il est "raccroché" à beaucoup d'éléments de notre vécu lors de la recherche de la solution.

Keywords

night autumn window color red woman curtain

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss020 The Encounter.
  Motif : mmm097 - Woman at the window.

Used techniques :


* S21 - Caesura between L2 and L3.
Caesura between L2 and L3.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* T3 - Stalling at the beginning of L3.
Stalling at the beginning of L3.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* T2 - Stalling in L2.
Stalling in L2.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

The atmosphere is mostly characterized by slow or motionless time.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content


* yugen - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)


* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. Archetypes are structures that have aggregated semes (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

e.g. Night, Fire, Death, Fall, Frontier...

Night: gloomy, dark, cold, threatening (lack of visibility of potential dangers), dangerous (legacy of ancient times), loss of Light, linked to the Unconscious through dreams and nightmares, silent world, mysterious, unknown, populated by fantastical beings.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 6-inf - Active infrastructure (archetypes, dialectics)


* courtmetrage - Short clip.
A haiku that could be a video clip. The initial sequence of a short film.

- Unity between surface and deep discourse.
- The deep discourse has a much longer unspoken extension. The surface discourse appears as a clutch for a deep discourse with a strong development.

Effects: resmem - Resonance in memory.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Abri - The shelter, the refuge, the greenhouse, the home, the nest.

Tout endroit de vie où on est abrité des conditions extérieures. La maison, la serre... En relation avec les dialectiques intérieur versus Extérieur, Chaud versus Froid. Souvent lié aux haïkus météo.

A distinguer du lieu Clos qui possède moins de sèmes. Au chaud dans une maison alors qu'il pleut dehors relève de l'Abri plus que lieu Clos.

* D_IntExt - In <> Out.


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