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first kiss --
behind the bookshelf
her scent lingers

premier baiser --
derrière l'étagère des livres
son odeur s'attarde

Liu Chen-ou, Canada
cco 2016-03-1


Ce haïku d'atmosphère me fait penser à un poème de Kenneth Rexroth "Au pied du mont Sorrate". C'est un haïku d'odeur. Il utilise aussi une technique du rappel du souvenir par l'odeur qui reste.


scent woman couple kiss love

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss029 Something reminds us of the Past.
  Motif : mmm013 - Something remains.

Schéma : sss019 Lingering smell.
  Motif : mmm081 - A passerby and a smell.

Used techniques :

* culturel - Use of external cultural reference.
The haiku is based on an external cultural element, well known by the reader. There is a sharing of an environment (place, situation...) or cultural element (music, painting...) that will seek memories or sensations in the memory and experience of the reader. This device saves a lot of space, nothing else is needed, the effect is achieved by the reader's contribution.

Effects: liavec - Binding to the reader's experience.

At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.

At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Vie - Life.

Toute manifestation d'un être pour affirmer sa présence, sa survie, parfois dans un contexte qui lui est défavorable.

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