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Analysis of the Haiku structure

first date --
wondering if the hat
is too much

premier rendez-vous --
je me demande si le chapeau
n'est pas de trop


Carol Raisfeld, USA
cco 2016-03-2

Commentaire.

Neuf semaines et demi.

Keywords

woman hat date

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :


* auteur - Presence of the author.
Presence of the author in the haiku, the author stages himself but does not necessarily speak about him.

Effects: liavec - Binding to the reader's experience.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-aut - Author's role


* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed (structural element 'clos') and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

It gives a view on one of the elements of the situation.

Effects: liavec - Binding to the reader's experience.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-aut - Author's role


* culturel - Use of external cultural reference.
The haiku is based on an external cultural element, well known by the reader. There is a sharing of an environment (place, situation...) or cultural element (music, painting...) that will seek memories or sensations in the memory and experience of the reader. This device saves a lot of space, nothing else is needed, the effect is achieved by the reader's contribution.

A mechanism similar to the geographic element (geo) that assumes that the reader is familiar with the geographic environment referred to by the author.

Effects: liavec - Binding to the reader's experience.


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)


* allusion - Allusion to something known by the reader.
This technique refers to something that is supposed to be known to the reader. This type of haiku only works for the reader who understands the allusion. It is often a cultural or geographical element or an environment shared between the author and the reader. The reference adds a note of complicity in the speech.

It can also be illustrated in jargon (specialized languages shared by a community).

Particular cases: the cultural (culturel) or geographic (geo) element.

ex: Liberty Market: a chain of stores in the USA.
ex: a movie, a book, a meal, a local feast.

Effects: resmem - Resonance in memory.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content

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