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Analysis of the Haiku structure

Mémorial de Lorette
Entre deux stèles le chant
D'un oiseau inconnu

Franck Vasseur, France
cco 2016-04-1


Nécropole nationale, avec depuis 2014, un anneau reprenant plus de 600.000 noms d'hommes tombés dans le Nord au cours de la première guerre. En une année, 188.000 hommes, dont 100.000 Français sont morts pour cette crête. Liaison entre oiseau et soldat inconnu. Archétype de la Vie qui triomphe, bien qu'ici, par procuration.


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Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku. (foliated)
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

Surface : x---------------------------x
Depth: x----------------------------x
(x------------------------x )

- Two parallel speeches with sharing semes.
- Horizontal caesura/break (=)
- The author says something on the superficial level and something else on the deep level. These two discourses are linked by a sharing of semes.
possibly several different deep discourses
- Deep discourse: parallel - structural element: concordance
- Deep discourse: independent - structural element: discordance
- structural element: foliated
- the "foliated" structural element is always an explicit construction of the author.
- the foliated often leads to the concordance between surface and deep discourse. The deep discourse is then another aspect of the surface discourse.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.

At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-trait - Style,subject handling

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