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son ventre énorme
attend-elle la pleine lune
la chatte qui dort


Gérard Dumon, France
cco 2016-04-2

Commentaire.

Ne jamais oublier qu'un haïku naît du regard amusé de l'auteur sur les choses. Et ici, je me suis bien amusé à cette remarque. Le haïku est porté par l'analogie entre grossesse et rotondité de la lune. Une analogie très profonde venue du fond des âges. Le chat reste par ailleurs un animal un peu mystérieux, craint à la lune en périodes de chaleur... Toujours bien faire attention aux haïkus qui semblent innocents. Qui sait ?

Keywords

cat moon pregnant humour full_moon

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss040 Me and the World.
  Motif : mmm099 - Woman, cat, moon.

Used techniques :


* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed (structural element 'clos') and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

It gives a view on one of the elements of the situation.

Effects: liavec - Binding to the reader's experience.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-aut - Author's role


* dislocation - Dislocation.
Dislocation: repetition of the subject at the end (or at the beginning) of the sentence. The repeated subject is then specified. This delays understanding and insists on the main subject of the speech.

ex: He loses his leaves, the tree.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)


* union - Union between author and subject.
A link, union, between the author and a being, animal or thing. Empathy.

Effects: liavec - Binding to the reader's experience.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-aut - Author's role


* glissement - Shift from one meaning to another.
Shift of discourse from one meaning to another. It's the whole discourse that changes meaning. Not to be confused with the surprise, which is an unexpected element that does not deeply change the meaning of the discourse.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* potentiel - Development potential.
The situation presented in the discourse contains elements that will develop. We are not 'just before' but rather like a bud.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content

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