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Analysis of the Haiku structure

night deepening
the office secretary adjusts
her low-cut top

la nuit avance
la secrétaire réajuste
son top décolleté


Liu Chen-ou, Canada
cco 2016-04-2

Commentaire.

Haïku d'atmosphère. L'auteur ne dit rien de la situation. Il pose les choses et laisse le lecteur imaginer la suite et ce qui a précédé. C'est l'ouverture de ce haïku qui lui donne sa force.

Keywords

night woman erotic breast cleavage

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :


* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

The atmosphere is mostly characterized by slow or motionless time.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content


* ellipse - Ellipsis.
Ellipsis: Only the minimum is said but the whole situation can be reconstruct by the reader.
This is also the case when only a part of the discourse is present. The remaining part can be guessed by the reader.

A different technique from allusion, because here the reader has to guess what is not said. The unspoken part is not necessarily part of a context shared by author and reader but must only be deduced from the discourse.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* xxx - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)

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