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cold rain -
the bus pulls back
onto the highway

Brian Austin Darnell, USA
cco 2017-01-2


Le bus est reparti, laissant l'homme là dans la pluie froide. Archétype de l'Abandon. Opposition entre l'Intérieur (du bus) chaud et l'Extérieur froid de la pluie, entre le Clos (bus) et l'Ouvert du monde. Il m'a fallu une explication pour comprendre ce haïku. On est ici dans l'ellipse mais peut-être un peu trop. N'empêche, l'atmosphère en vaut la peine.


rain cold highway bus loneliness

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* absence - The main element is not explicit.
The haiku is organized around an element voluntarily not explicitly quoted to which each image refers. The interest is to save the space that would be used by naming the element while having the effect it produces.

The haiku can appear as a vault from which the scaffolding has been removed. If the haiku is well composed, the main element is absent but everything refers to it.

This technique delays storage in memory because the reader must complete the discourse with the unnamed element so that the haiku is unambiguously understandable. It then acquires a higher memory weight.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.

At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-trait - Style,subject handling

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

The atmosphere is mostly characterized by slow or motionless time.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.

At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. Archetypes are structures that have aggregated semes (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

e.g. Night, Fire, Death, Fall, Frontier...

Night: gloomy, dark, cold, threatening (lack of visibility of potential dangers), dangerous (legacy of ancient times), loss of Light, linked to the Unconscious through dreams and nightmares, silent world, mysterious, unknown, populated by fantastical beings.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious

At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 6-inf - Active infrastructure (archetypes, dialectics)

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Abandon - To be abandoned.

Le sentiment d'abandon, de rester seul. Le fait d'être abandonné, pour un être ou un objet. Cet archétype peut être liée à celui de la Chute. Tous deux correspondent à des choses profondes en nous.

Peut être aussi lié au sabi, un terme qui désigne les marques de choses qui ont vécus.

* D_IntExt - In <> Out.

* D_ChaudFroid - Warm <> Cold.

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