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Analysis of the Haiku structure

jours courts~
ma place au soleil
dans la bibliothèque


Sarra Masmoudi, Tunisie
cco 2017-11-2

Commentaire.

Haïku d'atmosphère reposant sur l'archétype de l'Abri. Il est aussi activé par la dialectique Intérieur versus Extérieur. Le soleil éclairant la bibliothèque doit aussi jouer un rôle important et un double sens profond pourrait être aussi actif dans ce haïku. Un haïku magique pour moi.

Keywords

book reading winter light sun

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :


* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. Archetypes are structures that have aggregated semes (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

e.g. Night, Fire, Death, Fall, Frontier...

Night: gloomy, dark, cold, threatening (lack of visibility of potential dangers), dangerous (legacy of ancient times), loss of Light, linked to the Unconscious through dreams and nightmares, silent world, mysterious, unknown, populated by fantastical beings.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 6-inf - Active infrastructure (archetypes, dialectics)


* auteur - Presence of the author.
Presence of the author in the haiku, the author stages himself but does not necessarily speak about him.

Effects: liavec - Binding to the reader's experience.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-aut - Author's role


* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku. (foliated)
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

Surface : x---------------------------x
======
Depth: x----------------------------x
(x------------------------x )

- Two parallel speeches with sharing semes.
- Horizontal caesura/break (=)
- The author says something on the superficial level and something else on the deep level. These two discourses are linked by a sharing of semes.
possibly several different deep discourses
- Deep discourse: parallel - structural element: concordance
- Deep discourse: independent - structural element: discordance
- structural element: foliated
- the "foliated" structural element is always an explicit construction of the author.
- the foliated often leads to the concordance between surface and deep discourse. The deep discourse is then another aspect of the surface discourse.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-trait - Style,subject handling


* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

The atmosphere is mostly characterized by slow or motionless time.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Abri - The shelter, the refuge, the greenhouse, the home, the nest.

Tout endroit de vie où on est abrité des conditions extérieures. La maison, la serre... En relation avec les dialectiques intérieur versus Extérieur, Chaud versus Froid. Souvent lié aux haïkus météo.

A distinguer du lieu Clos qui possède moins de sèmes. Au chaud dans une maison alors qu'il pleut dehors relève de l'Abri plus que lieu Clos.

* A_Lumière - The Light.

La Lumière.
A mettre en relation avec la Lumière dans la Nuit.

* D_IntExt - In <> Out.


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