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Analysis of the Haiku structure

friday afternoon--
just the bees
in lavender

vendredi après-midi --
juste les abeilles
dans la lavande


Robyn Cairns, Australia
cco 2018-10-1

Commentaire.

Un haïku d'atmosphère dans lequel l'auteure perçoit un détail. Une variante des haïkus où on détecté un léger changement. Ce détail est la base de l'atmosphère, c'est lui qui lui donne sa dimension. Une technique à bien étudier.

Keywords

afternoon bee sound flower

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss041 Just, nothing but...
  Motif : mmm082 - Nothing but, just...

Used techniques :


* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

The atmosphere is mostly characterized by slow or motionless time.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content


* detail - A detail is the key element of the haiku.
The strength of these haikus lies in a detail, either in its relationship to other elements or images, or in its own strength. It plays the active role and will be remembered.

We can recognize there the action of the archetype of the A_PointActif.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures

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