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صف أزرار فستانك -
ترسانة عسكرية
بكامل عتادها

Le rang des boutons de ta robe
un arsenal militaire
avec tout son matériel


Meryem Lahlou, Maroc
cco 2019-01-1

Commentaire.

J'ai bien aimé ce senryu par l'ellipse de son discours. Il m'a aussi fait penser à la chanson "Jolie Môme" (barrière de frou-frou).

Keywords

humour woman clothes robe erotic

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :


* poesie - Use of poetical devices.
Use of poetical devices.

Effects: liavec - Binding to the reader's experience.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-style - Writing style.


* ellipse - Ellipsis.
Ellipsis: Only the minimum is said but the whole situation can be reconstruct by the reader.
This is also the case when only a part of the discourse is present. The remaining part can be guessed by the reader.

A different technique from allusion, because here the reader has to guess what is not said. The unspoken part is not necessarily part of a context shared by author and reader but must only be deduced from the discourse.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)


* rheto - Rhetorical devices.
Use of rhetorical figures for emphasis, highlighting ... It's more the technical aspect of writing than the poetry of the content.

Effects: react - Provokes a reaction from the reader.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-style - Writing style.

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