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machine à écrire
la grêle tambourine sur la lucarne


Jean-Baptiste Pélissier, France
cco 2019-02-1

Commentaire.

Haïku basé sur la similitude et l’opposition simultanée. Similitude des bruits, opposition entre Intérieur et Extérieur, phénomène naturel et objet artificiel. Il contient cependant une atmosphère étrange portée par la lucarne, une petite fenêtre de toit, et une machine à écrire, marqueur qu’un temps passé, qui ouvre une réflexion à l’Imaginaire. Qui peut encore bien utiliser cet instrument ? Voilà qui crée de l’activité en mémoire à court-terme lors de la phase de liage vers le stockage plus long.

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Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss023 Living Objects.
  Motif : mmm002 - Computers and meteo

Used techniques :


* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

The atmosphere is mostly characterized by slow or motionless time.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content


* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)


* son - Active sounds in the text.
Use of sonorities in the text. Sound plays an active and central role in the discourse. The mention of the named sound imitates the sound heard.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-trait - Style,subject handling


* opp-sim - Opposition-similarity.
Opposition AND similarity. A relationship between two terms is both an opposition and a similarity.

For example: an egg on the plate and the setting sun. There is a sharing of the semes of roundness, red, but opposition between Up versus Bottom, Large versus Small.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Abri - The shelter, the refuge, the greenhouse, the home, the nest.

Tout endroit de vie où on est abrité des conditions extérieures. La maison, la serre... En relation avec les dialectiques intérieur versus Extérieur, Chaud versus Froid. Souvent lié aux haïkus météo.

A distinguer du lieu Clos qui possède moins de sèmes. Au chaud dans une maison alors qu'il pleut dehors relève de l'Abri plus que lieu Clos.

* D_IntExt - In <> Out.


* D_Nature - Nature versus Domesticated.


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