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Analysis of the Haiku structure

closing time
empty bottles
empty faces

heure de fermeture
bouteilles vides
visages vides


Bryan Rickert, USA
cco 2019-05-1

Commentaire.

J'aime bien ces haïkus basés sur la juxtaposition. Celui-ci cependant n'est pas "une liste de commission (grocery list). Il mime la situation par sa disposition et le silence qu'il contient. Haïku tragique merveilleusement rendu par la composition.

Keywords

bar alcool silence night face poverty

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :


* juxtaposition - Juxtaposition.
Use of images placed side by side to create an effect superior to that of each separate image. It is not a resonance effect as in similarity but rather a composition effect as in a painting or still life.

As the juxtaposed images have no or very few common semes, they compose a new global image in relation to its components.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)


* avant - Just before.
We're just before something happens. The haiku captures the moment before the situation changes from one state to another. Like, for example, just before the rain or a thunderstorm..

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content


* fin - Final element gives the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)


* S3 - Three elements haiku.
Three independent elements compose the haiku. Also known as the grocery list.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* dur - Harsh subject.


Effects: react - Provokes a reaction from the reader.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-trait - Style,subject handling

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