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Analysis of the Haiku structure

Fenêtre ouverte
de la maison voisine
odeur de café


Chantal Toune, France
cco 2019-08-2

Commentaire.

Haïku minimaliste mais tous les éléments y sont. Il s'appuie aussi sur une odeur riche, celle du café, toujours efficace. A remarquer, la manière dont l'auteure a écrit L3. Contrairement à beaucoup de textes ratés où on nous dit ce qu'il faut comprendre; ici, l'auteure a simplement posé un élément et laissé la liberté d'imaginer au lecteur. Une leçon à retenir.

Keywords

window coffee neighbor smell

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :


* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

The atmosphere is mostly characterized by slow or motionless time.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content


* S21 - Caesura between L2 and L3.
Caesura between L2 and L3.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* fin - Final element gives the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures

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