Year 2023 : from February 1st to 15th
travailleur de nuit
dans une flaque d’eau
le jour se lève
Facebook, 2023-02-04
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Haiku based on the motif of the sky in the puddle, but here, in addition to the opposition of High versus Low, there is also that of Night versus Day (Light versus Dark). Note that an opposition is ma ... >>> la suite...
Eléonore Nickolay
Vaires sur Marne France
drifting clouds
she sings to herself
a child's song
nuages à la dérive
elle se chante à elle-même
une chanson d'enfant
Modern Haiku : issue ofWinter-Spring 2023
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Haiku of atmopshere with a similarity of situations between the Top (clouds) and the Bottom (her). The similarity relates to the lightness and the evanescence (here of the memory). To note that the si ... >>> la suite...
Carol Raisfeld
Atlantic Beach, New-York USA
jour finissant
les derniers contours
du bol de soupe
Le Coucou du Haïku, 2023-02-14
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A wonderful atmospheric haiku that suggests more than it says. It expresses a feeling at the deep level without saying it explicitly (superficial level). Note the shift in meaning of the discourse at ... >>> la suite...
Nadège Vexlard
France
fête foraine
coincé entre montagnes russes
et tir aux ballons
Le Coucou du Haïku, 2023-02-14
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Message haiku and war haiku: two extremely difficult types to write. However, this one is a wonderful success. The double reading of the discourse allows to say one thing (international situation) on ... >>> la suite...
Bikko
Poitiers France
la terre tremble-
des histoires de vie
sous les décombres
Le Coucou du Haïku, 2023-02-13
Fathi Wahada
Sousse Tunisie
décombres
aucune trace de frontière
entre deux pays
Le Coucou du Haïku, 2023-02-08
Olfa Kchouk Bouhadida
Tunis Tunisie
ريح-
رقصة أخيرة
لشمعة وحيدة
Vent-
Une dernière danse
pour la bougie solitaire
Facebook, 2023-02-02
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Atmospheric haiku with layered discourse. The archetype of Fragility is active in the flame of the candle. That of Death in the words "last" and "lonely". A discourse probably deeper than it seems at ... >>> la suite...
Meryem Lahlou
Oujda Maroc
temps d'aâzara* ~
elle aussi a ses humeurs
la machine à coudre
*Les aâzara sont une succession de 11 jours du 3 au 13 février connus pour leur temps changeant, tantôt froid et pluvieux tantôt tiède.
Sarra Masmoudi
Tunis Tunisie
old church wall
maidenhair fern
climbing to heaven
mur de la vieille église
la fougère à cheveux de jeune fille
grimpe au ciel
Maidenhair fern : Adiantum- genre de fougères de la famille des Pteridaceae. (pas de noms vernaculaires) - previously published in The Remembered Arts Journaland Haiku Column
Agnieszka Filipek
Pologne
Jour de manif
les slogans défilent devant
l'étal d'oranges
Facebook, 2023-02-11
Evelyne Bélard
Angaïs, Aquitaine France
لا طعام بالمطبخ،
تحطّ الذّبابة
على عنب السّيراميك
Pas de nourriture dans la cuisine,
la mouche se pose
sur les raisins en céramique
Facebook, 2023-02-05
Latifa Oudouhou
Ouarzazate Maroc
midwinter
alone with a pile
of half-read books
midwinter
seule avec une pile
de livres à moitié lus
Originally published in Frogpond
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Haiku of atmosphere. It is also carried by the archetypes of Shelter (home) and Passage (mid-winter). Note the similarity between mid-winter and readings. There is a superficial caesura (winter / read ... >>> la suite...
Debbi Antebi
London UK
Futsuka * -
reflets gris dans les flaques
de l'an passé
(* mot de saison signifiant "deuxième jour")
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A rare illustration of the motif of continuity after a milestone, carried by the archetype of the Passage (of a milestone, here temporal). Note also the opposition High (gray sky) versus Low (puddle). ... >>> la suite...
Damien Gabriels
Leers France
pelant la courge
à la pointe du couteau
une goutte de sang
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Shift of meaning in the discourse, the blood does not come from the vegetable. ... >>> la suite...
Damien Gabriels
Leers France
feuilles mortes -
la tombée du jour ondule
derrière une péniche
Damien Gabriels
Leers France
our summer affair
the ocean now wreathed
in drizzled rain
notre liaison d'été
l'océan maintenant enveloppé
sous une pluie fine
published in Failed Haiku #86
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Haïku with a tanka structure. A personal situation is supported by a meteo situation to create a discourse like in a tanka. Note the inversion of the two segments compared to a tanka: L1 (personal) f ... >>> la suite...
Cynthia Rowe
Sydney Australia
lake mist
the gentle lap
of my dying cat
brume du lac
les douces caresses
de mon chat mourant
Twitter, 2023-02-08
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Haiku from before death. Haïku carried the archetype of Death. The atmosphere is expressed by using a meteo element (the mist) and a calm environment (the lake). ... >>> la suite...
missed deadline
my freshly brewed tea
bittersweet
échéance manquée
mon thé fraîchement infusé
doux-amer
Twitter, 2023-02-06
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Haiku of atmosphere but of a particular type. It supports a situation (L1) to a feeling (L3) a bit like a weather haiku in order to better render the atmosphere. A figure also used during arguments o ... >>> la suite...
Eva Limbach
Saarbrücken Germany
a tempting feast...
taking a first bite
the blue bottle
un festin tentant...
elle prend une première bouchée
la mouche bleue
Twitter, 2023-02-06
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Here is a haiku with a rather rare discourse: that of the irruption of a detestable being (the fly). We must not forget that haiku is not only "sugar", it also tells about degradation and the end of t ... >>> la suite...
Marilyn Ward
Scunthorpe , Lincolnshire UK
autumn moon
I grow old
with my shadow
lune d'automne
je vieillis
avec mon ombre
published in the lovely Triya Patrika Basant edition
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Atmospheric haiku with a layered discourse; the author says something different at the deep level than at the superficial level. There is however concordance of the two discourses, through semes (shar ... >>> la suite...
Mona Bedi
Delhi India
Translated into English with the assistance of www.DeepL.com/Translator (free version)