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Year 2023 : from June 16th to 30th

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un citrin se pose
sur la feuille de menthe -
mojito

Facebook, 2023-06-16

>>> Analyse...
A discourse with a rare and special structure. It works on a parallelism of semes between the colors/smells described at surface level (text) and those suggested at deep level by L3. It's a visual moj ... >>> la suite...

Isabelle Lamant Meunier
Aubervilliers France

mon café
déborde du cezve* ~
jour trop long

*Petit pot pour préparer le café turc à feu très doux tout en prenant bien soin pour qu'il ne déborde pas. - Facebook, 2023-06-21

>>> Analyse...
A parallelism between the length of the day and that of the coffee. The discourse is better balanced than if L3 were in L1 (2+1 instead of 1+2). L3 also appears as an observation linked to the overflo ... >>> la suite...

Sarra Masmoudi
Tunis Tunisie

le buvard d'enfance
imbibé d'encre violette
ciel d'orage

Facebook, 2023-06-22

>>> Analyse...
Here, the link between context and memory is made through color, an effective feeling. Note that L3 adds tension to the discourse. ... >>> la suite...

Annie Chassing
Saint-Maur-des-Fossés, Val de Marne France

nuit d'été
a-t-elle avalé une locomotive

Facebook, 2023-06-25

>>> Analyse...
A curious elliptical speech. Here, humor compensates for the incompleteness of the text. A figure to be understood in haiku evaluations. ... >>> la suite...

Mido Yorokobi
France

rue passante
sorti de la cacophonie
un chant arabe

Un Haïku par jour, 2023-06-22

>>> Analyse...
A discourse with a zoom effect. We go from wide (L1) to punctual (L3) slon a progression tightening the focus. A little-used but effective figure. ... >>> la suite...

Robert Gillouin
France

après l'orage
Il sort des brumes
le chant du merle

Un Haïku par jour, 2023-06-12

>>> Analyse...
This discourse operates mainly on the basis of the Active Point archetype. In a large context, a "small-sized" element stands out and is active. The size is not dimensional, but relative to the contex ... >>> la suite...

Robert Gillouin
France

sur le tas d'ordures
souffle
la brise matinale

Un Haïku par jour, 2023-06-19

>>> Analyse...
Haiku of marked oppositions. Between Nature (L3) and the products of Man (L1), but also between the Ugly (L1) and the Beautiful, the Light (L3). Zen haiku at its best. ... >>> la suite...

Hamid Wahibi
Tanger Maroc

dos à dos dans le tram-
l'intimité
de son eau de toilette

Un Haïku par jour, 2023-06-18

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Monique Junchat
France

solstice d’été
ses cheveux relevés en chignon

Anne Dealbert
France

demi de la lune
dans un ciel bleu translucide
marcher les pieds nus

Facebook, 2023-06-26

>>> Analyse...
This discourse is part of a larger whole of the Upper (Sky, Moon, Sun...) reflected in the Lower (puddle, cup, container...). It's also linked to the pleasure of jumping in the puddle, but also to the ... >>> la suite...

Domino Jacquet
Liège Belgique

queue for food --
the growling stomachs
break the silence

la file d'attente pour la nourriture...
les estomacs qui grondent
rompent le silence

Haiku in action - June 14th - June 18th

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Hifsa Ashraf
Rawalpindi, Punjab Pakistan

Klimaprotest –
rund um den Straßenbaum wächst
wilder Weizen

climate protest –
growing around the street tree
wild wheat

Protestation climatique -
autour de l'arbre de la rue pousse
du blé sauvage

Haiku heute, 2023-06-18

>>> Analyse...
Haiku based on the archetype of Life triumphing. L1 could even be deleted. It adds an unnecessary element to the core of the discourse (L2 L3) and may appear as an opinion of the author. ... >>> la suite...

Eva Limbach
Saarbrücken Germany

the same prayer
from years ago
day moon

la même prière
qu'il y a des années
lune de jour

Five Fleas blog spot, 2023-06-20

>>> Analyse...
Strange discourse based on ellipsis (we don't know the situation) and yugen (mystery). Note the unexplained link between L1, L2 and L3. This inability to make up one's mind is the driving force behin ... >>> la suite...

Mona Bedi
Delhi India

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